Paper 2 Activity 4

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May 2, 2011

Mr. Andrés Carias
General Principal


Centro Escolar El Roble
Guatemala

Mr. Carias:

I hope that the activities of the school are going very well. I want to take this opportunity to tell you about this idea that I have been wondering. It is about a new school club. I have always enjoyed playing chess with my classmates, and we always talk about the idea of starting a chess club. We think it would be a good idea because if we play more, we can get better and go to the national championship and represent the school. But also, I wanted to propose this idea to you because I think that playing chess helps the development of the young people. So this can help every student of the school that wants to play and learn at the same time. So, let me tell you more about this idea.

So this is how to club would go. First of all, it would not alter the normal schedule of the school because it would go about 3 or 4 in the afternoon. The days of the activity will depend on the age of the students; it could be Monday for 9 to 12 year old, Wednesdayfor 13 to 15 and Friday for 16 to 18. And, it would take place at the gym because it is a silent place at that hour.

I really think that the school should support this idea because it is a sport that the school does not practice and I think that people will enjoy. This will help students to explore their abilities, and not just any sport, chess takes skill and a lot of thinking. For students it will be a great benefit to have a chess club. Similarly for the school, as we will have good students who represent us in the national chess tournaments. And also it will be a good opportunity for some teachers.

I leave the proposal asking you to take it really seriously, and I hope that you make the right decision, so we can start soon in the best possible way. I really think it's a great opportunity for students and teachers to explore their thoughts and skills required for this sport. And the benefit it will bring to them and the school to represent us and experience new skills.

Hoping the best,

Rodrigo Contreras.

Review III

May 2, 2011

Mr. Andrés Carias
General Principal


Centro Escolar El Roble
Guatemala

Mr. Carias:

I hope that the activities of the school are going very well. I want to take this opportunity to tell you about this idea that have me wondering about a new school club. I have always enjoyed playing chess with my classmates, and we always talk about the idea of starting a chess club. We think it would be a good idea because if we play more, we can get better and go to the national championship and represent the school. But also, I wanted to propose this idea to you because I think that playing chess helps the development of the young people. So this can help every student of the school that wants to play and learn at the same time. So, let me tell you more about this idea.

So this is how to club would go. First of all, it would not alter the normal schedule of the school because it would go about 3 or 4 in the afternoon. The days of the activity will depend on the age of the students; it could be Monday for 9 to 12 year old, Wednesday for 13 to 15 and Friday for 16 to 18. And, it would take place at the gym because it is a silent place at that hour.

I really think that the school should support this idea because it is a sport that the school does not practice and I think that people will enjoy. This will help students to explore their abilities, and not just any sport, chess takes skill and a lot of thinking. For students it will be a great benefit to have a chess club. Similarly for the school, as we will have good students who represent us in the national chess tournaments. And also it will be a good opportunity for some teachers.

I leave the proposal asking you to take it really seriously, and I hope that you make the right decision, so we can start soon in the best possible way. I really think it's a great opportunity for students and teachers to explore their thoughts and skills required for this sport. And the benefit it will bring to them and the school to represent us and experience new skills.

Hoping the best,

Rodrigo Contreras.

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Review II

May 2, 2011

Mr. Andrés Carias
General Principal


Centro Escolar El Roble
Guatemala

Mr. Carias:

I hope that the activities of the school are going very well. I have always enjoyed playing chess with my classmates, and we always talk about the idea of starting a chess club. We think it would be a good idea because if we play more, we can get better and go to the national championship and represent the school. But also, I wanted to propose this idea to you because I think that playing chess helps the development of the young people. So this can help every student of the school that wants to play and learn at the same time. So, let me tell you more about this idea.

First of all, it would not alter the normal schedule of the school because it would go about 3 or 4 in the afternoon. The days of the activity will depend on the age of the students; it could be Monday for 9 to 12 year old, Wednesday for 13 to 15 and Friday for 16 to 18. And, it would take place at the gym because it is a silent place at that hour.

I really think that the school should support this idea because it is a sport that the school does not practice and I think that people will enjoy. This will help students to explore their abilities, and not just any sport, chess takes skill and a lot of thinking. For students it will be a great benefit to have a chess club. Similarly for the school, as we will have good students who represent us in the national chess tournaments.

I leave the proposal asking you to take it really seriously, and I hope that you make the right decision, so we can start in the best possible way. I really think it's a great opportunity for students to explore their thoughts and skills required for this sport. And the benefit it will bring to them and the school to represent us and experience new skills.

Sincerely,

Rodrigo Contreras.

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May 2, 2011

Mr. Andrés Carias
General Principal


Centro Escolar El Roble
Guatemala

Mr. Carias:

I hope that the activities of the school are going very well. I have always enjoy(enjoyed) playing chess with my classmates, and we always talk about the idea of starting a chess club. We think it World(would) be a good idea because if we play more(,) we can get better and go to the nacional(national) championship and represent the school. But also, I wanted to propose this idea to you because I think that playing chess helps the developmen(development) of the young people. So this can help every student of the school that wants to play and learn at the same time. So, let me tell you more about this idea.

First of all, it would be(not) alter the normal Schedule(schedule) of the school (because it would go) about 3 or 4 in the afternoon. The days of the activity will depend on the age of the students(,)(;) it could be monday(Monday) for 9 to 12 years(year old), Wednesday fot(for) 13 to 15 years and Friday for 16 to 18 years. And(,) it World(would) take place at the gym because it is a silent place at that hour.

I really think that the school should support this idea because (it) is a sport that the school does not practice and I think that people will enjoy. This will help students to explore their abilities, and not just any sport, chess takes skill and a lot of thinking. For students it will be a great benefit to have a chess club. Similarly for the school, as we will have good students who represent us in the national chess tournaments.

I leave the proposal asking you that(to) take it really seriously, and I hope that you make the right decision, so we can start in the best possible way. I really think it's a great opportunity for students to explore their thoughts and skills required for this sport. And the benefit it will bring to them and the school(,) to represent us and experience new skills.

Sincerely,

Rodrigo Contreras.

Paper 2 activity 3

Mr. Carias

May 2, 2011

Mr. Andrés Carias
General Principal


Centro Escolar El Roble
Guatemala

Mr. Carias:

I hope that the activities of the school are going very well. I have always enjoy playing chess with my classmates, and we always talk about the idea of starting a chess club. We think it World be a good idea because if we play more we can get better and g oto the nacional championship and represent the school. But also, I wanted to propose this idea to you because I think that playing chess helps the developmen of the young people. So this can help every student of the school that wants to play and learn at the same time. So, let me tell you more about this idea.

First of all, it would be alter the normal Schedule of the school about 3 or 4 in the afternoon. The days of the activity will depend on the age of the students, it could be monday for 9 to 12 years, Wednesday fot 13 to 15 years and Friday for 16 to 18 years. And it World take place at the gym because it is a silent place at that hour.

I really think that the school should support this idea because is a sport that the school does not practice and I think that people will enjoy. This will help students to explore their abilities, and not just any sport, chess takes skill and a lot of thinking. For students it will be a great benefit to have a chess club. Similarly for the school, as we will have good students who represent us in the national chess tournaments.

I leave the proposal asking you that take it really seriously, and I hope that you make the right decision, so we can start in the best possible way. I really think it's a great opportunity for students to explore their thoughts and skills required for this sport. And the benefit it will bring to them and the school, to represent us and experience new skills.

Sincerely,

Rodrigo Contreras.